In Merely A Day (sad sad sad)

Staring at the moon,
I see my past unfolding,
The pain the joy,
Bundled in one new understanding,

An angel fell into my arms,
But I was just a devil,
Defiling the purest skin,
With every touch.

Your eyes sparkled
Without flaw,
But slowly darkened
As we started to fall,

Dont tell me now,
I've been to late
To blow the embers of love
Dwelling in our hearts
Almost dying.

You were my angel,
Without flaw,
Lost to me now
Despite it all.

Very beautiful!

Have you written other things Landarklord?

THE RING

Your ring, thrown skywards, to land nearest the jar...
Given a place at destinys side...
To win the treasure saught by all...
A share in the happiness of ages...
Time slows as it enters the neck of the vessel...
From the agony of doubt to the ecstasy of knowing...

Knowing all but expecting nothing in return...
An empty ring sounds upon the wall of clay...
Fate is sealed, nothing can break it but time...
Chances are never given lightly...
Share them with a spirit that is pure and true...
As they will prove the richest treasure...

Treasure never to be squandered or wasted...
Of knowing, without being aware of self...
To share the space and freedom to truly be...
Circled by a ring of warm, honest fire...
Given to you the brightest flame...
That lights the infinite hall of time...

Time quickens, as does the heart, at fates' choice...
We treasure friendship as it is meant to be...
With all the happiness and joy that can be given...
As it rests at the bottom of the jar, still and knowing...
The ring, no matter how precious, is a mere token...
It becomes a symbol of our desire to share...

Share in the wonder of our souls innocence...
Time, all that you have, all that you are...
Bearing the weight and sadness of that ring...
All the treasure of the world leaves us empty...
Our souls naked to the knowing crystal gaze...
Open to the depth of love given...

Given freely into the arms of those who love us...
Share all that you are, your soul will find its mark...
Knowing that all things flow in and of each other...
Time to live, to give, to listen, to use all our wisdom...
Trasure the love that you bring yourself and others...
Ring in the changes that bring life to natures seasons...

To share in love that is given of itself...
Knowing that time will give all answers...
Is the real treasure contained in that ring...

I liked this alot. "Wot" you wrote was very nicely done.

Gillian

Thanks Gillian! Would you care to elaborate, as this is the first 'proper' poem I have written and would appreciate any critique...

Yep, Landarklord it is beautiful.

Here is a short one I composed today;

Incommunicado

The networks must be down...
You are somewhere on the town.
I dunno where, I dunno why.
Time to spend but not with me.
That tells me we may have no future.
It tears my heart that is not there,
I forgot,
you took it with when you kissed me...

the networks must be down...

Corny I know but it expresses my feelings when I can't get hold of my jewel.

I agree with Maria and blue!:)

Yes I have about 40 poems I have written, mainly love poetry, but some of it is about the dark side of life

Good one Strat, I also dabble but tend to be less verbose... my attention span is probably too short. LOL

Hi again,

It's a really well crafted piece. And, if that's the first real poem you've ever written - then your phrasing, the imagery, your choice of words says that you have a poetic soul and a great gift. One that perhaps you should pay attention to and nurture some more.

I'd enjoy reading more of "wot" you write!

I posted a link under an earlier thread entitled "For Maria" - she had asked for a link to a web-based poetry site I've belonged to for some years....(no...not poetry.com which is a complete scam!). She had wanted to read more of my work and so I introduced her to the site and along with it, some of my other poet colleagues that inhabit that little corner of my world.

I would encourage you to post your poem there, I think you'll find a wealth of honest critique, and a welcome befitting of such an obviously, as I said before, gifted poet.

Gillian
(a transplanted Brit!)

Destroying mountains
Defeating the dark
Brightening a soul
Everlasting

Bringing people close
The power to stop war
But not enough circles
The world.

Some despise it
Because of the pain
It has caused them
How Foolish

Most do crave it
But not all grasp it
Chasing it through
The void

The unexplainable
The irreplaceable
Always forgiving
Love.

Time stood still
Wondering
If the gaping hole
Would ever fill
As they lowered you
Into the ground

The sights
The sounds
The tears
The frowns

You were a friend
More like
A mother
Now without any pains
Only angels
A flutter

The sights
The sounds
The tears
The frowns

I wish I knew then
What I know now
Maybe then,
I would have been better
And as you left that morn
Said I love you

The sights
The sounds
The tears
The frowns

Too real,
But just a fantasy,
Everything I feel,
Is better than extasy.

Like a drug,
Inside my body,
Your love,
Need more inside me.

The alarm clock rings,
Breaking the long sweet kiss
In my dreams,
Ending that bliss.

Crying alone,
Sitting in my bed,
Without you near,
Just my fears.

The dream brings true bliss
And now it must do,
But each time I wake
My bliss is through.

Now I feel like my stuff is crap....:(

Hi lord, my poem was written with all of us in mind.
It was never my intention to make anyone feel frustrated with their words.
I read your poems and was moved by them, written from the heart, that is what makes them work for yourself and others.

'If' is a condensed version of 'The Ring', in many ways. Your poem on grief will touch many who have lost a loved one. I havn't even attempted to explore my raw feelings on relationships end! All credit to you!

Keep rubbing two dry words together and make fire!

Regards Strato

Hey Land, just in case you missed it, read my post regarding your poems under Stratocasters poem thread...peace

By this time all the world knows... Seems like we are a bunch of dumpees here lately. So here goes;

Dull Dead - Robert Le Noury (my nom de plume)

There is no angst...
There is no pain...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

Try to be nonchalant...
Try to be flippant...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

Laughing my head off...
Crying in my beer...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

I see as clear as crystal...
It stared me in the face...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

Trying to make sense...
Wishing for your presence...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

Nothing happens without a plan...
Sometimes Cupid is a scam...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

Next time his wings are history...
Next time ignorance is bliss...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

Now where did I put that gun...
I need to have some fun...
Just this dull dead feeling in my brain.

Falling in love and heartache always seems to get my poetic juices flowing...

landarklord~

I could really feel this poem... it's beautiful.

Beautiful! I had missed this one!

You know, you should have your own thread so that we can read all of your poems together, Land, do you want Sage or me to do that for you?

And yes, I got it before the end! :)

Yeah, it has very powerful imagery.

Here is one of mine, all about my brief fling. :-)

Supernova - Robert le Noury

It came without warning in the dawning
feelings so strong, feelings hidden all along
Bright as a Supernova our love shone
Fast and furious it grew, expanding
Blinded by the light
I never saw the night
Fading as all the energy is expended
How quick it ended...

The afterglow is gentle
Friendship from the chaos of my heart
Arose like an all enveloping cloud
Marks the spot in my soul that will never fade
Supernova's must be the starseed
for the making of the friendships we need
Never thought I would witness bear
creation of friendship so rare.

Hope you all like it.

Blue, there's a nice cadence to your poem, and I like the analogy, too. You also should have a thread just for you, open one!! :)

Originally posted by Maria
Blue, there's a nice cadence to your poem, and I like the analogy, too. You also should have a thread just for you, open one!! :)

Thanks Maria, at the moment the creative juices have waned... :-)

My own thread? Excuse me for saying this but I'm a little "board" illiterate, would you mind explaining a bit more? I am slightly confused about it

You know, how you opened this thread here and posted your poem?

So you could open one and put all your poems in it, like a sequence, so anyone who would like to see your poetry as a compilation, would have that one thread to read!

Moderators can merge all your threads into one, if you want, I can do that for you!

Did you understand what I mean? :)

Maria, How do I do that? and should I move the ones I have posted?

Ah yes, that would be nice if you dont mind doing it for me. Much thanks to you if you decide to do it for me hun. :D

Ok, let me try this! :)

Land I can change the title of this thread if you wish, like to Landark's poems, or anything you like.